英作文添削②

英会話教室で宿題に出されたライティングが、その次のクラスの時には添削の時間が無く残念な思いをした事がありました。
そしたら昨日先生のＣＡ(仮名)がわざわざ添削したものを私の家に届けにきてくれ、説明までしていってくれたのです！びっくり！感激！

ものすごく下手というか、メチャクチャな文章なので恥ずかしいのですが、少しでもこの硬い頭に残すためにここにアップしておこうと思います。あ～、それでも恥ずかしいけどね。
私のオリジナル文章は黒字で、先生の添削とコメントは赤字で示します。


February 23, 2007

When I was having English lesson last Friday, my teacher CA(仮名) asked me that why I was working English so hard?

When I had English class last Friday, my teacher CA asked me why I was working so hard at English?
last Friday という言葉を入れてしまうと進行形は使えないとＣＡは言う。わかるようなわからないような・・・え～ん、進行形も分かってないのか自分！

I answered her some how but I don’t think I explained it clearly. Let me think about it again.

First of all I think I like a languages. I like reading and I'm interested in what people are thinking of. Learning foreign languages helps a lot to get know foreigners who have contrary differentback groundsbackgroundsは1語. Because it It is not only studies how to speak, but to accept leaning about different cultures and different people. Even the small differences of the way of speaking in the way we speak shows various of ideas we have.

That reminds me who I am.These differences reinforce my own beliefs.

Here is one more reason I learn study English. When I was young I loved Western moviesmovies in English. I always wanted to understand them without subtitles.

After my children grew up and left home, I could afford to have some free time. Then IThen Iこれは間違いではないけど、この方がもっと洗練された言い方。 took English conversation program study immediately. And then Now I’ve been studying English for 11years.

Sometimes I feel I never get to improve my Englishmy English isn't improving. TheThis feeling really gets me down, but on the other hand I’m thrilled when I wasam able to communicate deeply throughin English.

ThoseThese are the reasons I stick to English.

ものすごく見づらいですね。
ま、こんな意味不明の文章を読んでやろうという人もいないでしょうから、いいか。だんだん元気がなくなって説明する気力もなくなってきました。練習を積んでいけば、いつかは、明確でわかりやすい文章が書けるようになるのかしら？